excerpt and intimacy redux

I think I’m going with this:

She shivered as chills danced over her skin. Her eyes moist half-slits, she looked up at him and sighed. Her fingers tangled once again in the heavy hair behind his ears.

His knees knocking together even though they were horizontal, he asked, “Do you want this?” His heart pounded in his ears when she gave a slight nod.

“I don’t know what to do,” she said.

“Just open yourself up to me.” The rose scent and flavor of her skin intoxicated him when he bent his head to her throat.

She wriggled around to rest her mouth against his ear. “I love you.” Her breath whispered poetry as they moved together in perfect rhythm.